This is one of my stories that I have written for free writing. I would like if you could give me feedback and stuff that I can use next time I hope you enjoy it.
🐋The huge whale🐳
One warm morning I decided to go fishing on my boat but then my boat stop working and I saw a whale. The whale was coming closer and closer it opened its mouth then the wale swallows me and my boat I think I made a huge mistake and then I saw dripping tentacles. The dripping tentacles made the whale sneeze then I made my boat work again we were out of there time to get home. Halfway home I checked if everything was in the back and then all of my stuff was gone but it was replaced by lots of fresh fish. I got excited this many fish could feed the whole street so I went home and had a feed I shared with everyone. What will happen next time I go fishing? Then I saw the dripping tentacles hanging from the trees, I can feel dripping water going down my back.
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