The Present ever

In the past weeks our class (Ako Ngatahi) were writing a short story about a video titled “The Present”. It was a story about a boy who got a present and it was a puppy. After he discovered that the puppy only had three legs.

Here is the video.

“The Present”

W.A.L.T: Write a narrative

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when….

• The title is suitable for the text.

• The orientation tells who the story is about, and when and where the story happened.
• The complication describes a problem and explains what happened next.
• The resolution explains how the problem was solved.

The present

One morning I was playing on my x-box.  My mum come home with a present. She opened up the blinds then.              

I opened the present it was a puppy. It was so cute because it had big brown eyes. I looked at it’s legs  I saw that the puppy had 3 legs. I threw the puppy on the floor because it was annoying me. Because he was distracting me from my game but I kept playing my game. Then he found a red ball under the desk. He run and bumped into the desk then he went under the desk and got the ball. He started to play with the ball. I watched him. I paused the game,  then he grabbed the ball and gave it to me. I felt bad because I had been mean to him. I picked up the ball and put it in my pocket. We went outside and played catch. By Aroha The End.