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Kia Ora  viewers today I will like to have some feedback about one of my evidence paragraphs as I said I would like some feedback about it in the comments. This is for my class's topic, we are learning about the body here is my writing.

Firstly, the Digestive system is greatest system because without it you would not be able to get the nutrients and energy out of the food you eat. If you Don't have the nutrients you origins will not be able to work and you wounded be able to get the nutrients.  


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Do you think this is good evidence?
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My amazing Body #2

W.A.L.T explain what different body system are and how they work.

kia ora, this week we have been learning about four different body parts. They are Digestive system, Nervous system, Muscular system and The Respiratory System. The Digestive system it's job is to get the nutrient out of the food you eat. The Nervous system sends messages to your brain, your Muscular system help you to move and they are connected to some of your bones. The last and final one the Respiratory system The Respiratory system helps you to breathe in and out. when you are eating your trachea will close up so you don't chock on your food.

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My Amazing body

My Amazing body

This term my class has been learning about the human body. There are two groups one was with Miss D and the other one was with Mrs Mclachlan. The first group that I was in was Miss D's for Miss D's we were doing Endocrine System, Circulatory System and the Skeletal System it was so fun because we done experiments and a lot more. Then we switched groups now I am in Miss Mclachlan's we are learning about the brain, The Digestive System, The Muscular system and The Respiratory System for the brain we are making a paper brain and we have been doing experiments too and we have done a google drawing about the body hope you enjoy.

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