Kia Ora viewers today I will like to have some feedback about one of my evidence paragraphs as I said I would like some feedback about it in the comments. This is for my class's topic, we are learning about the body here is my writing.
Firstly, the Digestive system is greatest system because without it you would not be able to get the nutrients and energy out of the food you eat. If you Don't have the nutrients you origins will not be able to work and you wounded be able to get the nutrients.
Do you think you have something stronger then this?
Do you think this is good evidence?
Do you think you have more informant that you could give me?
any way thanks for reading my blog hope to see a comment from you. See you in my next blog post.
Tuesday, September 25, 2018
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Hey Aroha,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoy your blog post,and you gave me a lot of information about the digestive system keep it up.
Thank you Celine for your comment. I would love it if you give me some feedback next time. will anyway thanks again for commenting on my blog.
DeleteHey Aroha,,
DeleteThank you for replying back to me. How was your day today?